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    Blog Posts of the Week

    Blog Posts of the Week are a showcase of student-curated blog posts, highlighting exemplary blog posts that demonstrate innovative uses of key rhetorical elements of class blog posts.  Students vote each week for the top two blog posts (and justify their decision) using the polls I post here.  Winners earn bragging rights and other perks to be decided upon by us at the beginning of the semester.

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Blog Post of the Week #6

2/20/2015

 
Remember to VOTE & COMMENT (on this blog post page, not the poll site) on the top three blog posts of the week.  Your comments should include PRAISES & PROBLEMS.

Your PRAISES should include a brief, reflective explanation for your votes and, if you want, a comment or two about what other students' sites did well that deserves recognition; feel free to name names here. 

Your PROBLEMS portion of your comment should include THREE ISSUES you see repeated throughout the blog posts that we all need to consider, address, and improve on (don't name names in this part, though).  

THANKS!
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Xinxiu Tian link
2/22/2015 11:20:15 am

I voted for Dora because her process journal was very detailed and closely related to her problems in her essay. Based on the comments Dr. Holt gave her, she found ways to improve the transition of her essay, trying to make her essay more intriguing and interesting. Great job!

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Weiwei Zhong
2/22/2015 12:25:06 pm

I like Xinxiu's blog post best. In her process writing of the persuasive essay v2, she analyze her problems in the essay in a very clear way. She list three biggest concern in the essay, and then figured out how to fix the problems. In addition to that, she also questioned herself why she commit such mistakes.
In her cover letter, the purpose of the essay is clearly stated and the differences between the first and final draft are listed, which offers readers a easier to reread her essay.

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Caroline Luo
2/22/2015 03:09:47 pm

My favourite blog post this week is Dora's blog post. She clearly lists what mistakes she made on her first draft and how she revises to make a better version. I also love the video she places on her blog post: "I write my paper with transitions". Because the main problem for my paper is the lack of transition, this video is useful for me to revise my paper.

I also vote for Shao because he posts an interesting photo of how he revises his paper. I think their uses of photos and video provide me a clearer process of how they revise their paper than the use of words. This is the problem of my blog post and what I should work on in my future blog post.

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Qinyi She
2/22/2015 04:25:22 pm

I vote for Xinxiu's post because I think her thoughts about how to revise the essay is clear and organized. She displays her planned revision for each part of the essay in detail and discusses why and how will she change the essay. Moreover, I can read from her post that she learns more about writing and has an overall improvement. As for problems of all the blog posts, I think we should add more explanations to make our claim clearer and interesting.

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Danny
2/22/2015 06:08:38 pm

I liked Shao's post because I was in the same boat about my v1 paper. I had a lot of ideas just spat all over my paper. They were unorganized, unclear, and too many. Seeing the numerous amounts of red markers made me cringe and made me think that the paper was unfix-able.
After I am done revising it, I know I will have errors on them, but perhaps using Shao's methods will result in a better paper.

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Young Moo Yoo
2/23/2015 02:46:04 am

I voted for Carol's blog. In my point of view, she leads the reader into right direction and that is the purpose of cover letter. In other words, in her cover letter she well delineates what she is going to write and what was her challenges while writing this persuasive essay. Also her usage of images help reader to be more focused on her writing. While I am reading her post, I don't know why she hyper-linked the word globalization and unless she clarifies the reason that will be the only problem in her blog post.

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Bella
2/23/2015 03:49:55 am

I voted for Dora's Blog post. The reasons are as follows. fiirst, the blog post reveals the process she revised her essay in detail, and this show her efforts on the revision itself and the blog post as well. Also, she used the metaphor in our readings, which fits very well in her post. Finally, she was not only revising according to others opinions but her own thoughts as well. For all the blog post this week, I found the worst thing is some people didn't even post the 6th blog post. Others are just jump through it by using large fonts which seems there is not too little content in the blog post.

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Even
2/23/2015 04:07:27 am

I voted for Dora's website this week. In my mind, it is very difficult to incorporate multi-modality because the cover letter and process journal are all text-based. However, Dora did very well and put a video of teaching us how to make transitions, which was useful and motivating.

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George
2/23/2015 04:38:35 am

I vote for Dora's blog post. She successfully applied the idea talked in class about skin and bones into her personal writing, which is interesting. In addition, she clearly knows what her essay is lack of, such as transitions but not the idea itself. Her well-knowledge about her own essay and also the selection of her video about transitions show the effort she put in the post.

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Jiayu Yao
2/25/2015 01:57:47 am

I vote for Shao this week. I have the same problem with him. I have lots of ideas but they are unorganized and unclear. I have a hard time connecting them together. And my transition between ideas is also awkward.
I choose the same method as Shao's. I leave out some ideas and develop other ideas into detail.

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Bella
3/2/2015 01:51:05 am

I vote for Xinxiu this week. She combined the analysis of our readings into her introduction of her memoir very well. Also she had some descriptive language.

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